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Post by Tom on Aug 5, 2013 0:13:40 GMT
Sorry yes that is rather vague isn't it? I had some ideas that I was going to work into his first quest if he ever got out on one but they might be better off going into his profile first.
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Post by Echo on Aug 5, 2013 0:21:23 GMT
It's often helpful to have anything relevant in the profile - try to make them as detailed as possible without going too overboard
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Post by Tom on Aug 5, 2013 1:07:47 GMT
I'll do the necessary editing tomorrow when I feel more awake
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Post by Echo on Aug 5, 2013 1:08:13 GMT
Haha, fair enough
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Post by Tom on Aug 5, 2013 1:09:38 GMT
If I still do something silly with it please tell me
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Post by Echo on Aug 5, 2013 1:25:35 GMT
Will do
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Post by Tom on Aug 5, 2013 10:05:56 GMT
Done a bit of an edit. How does it look?
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Post by Echo on Aug 5, 2013 11:03:56 GMT
Better, well done. The only point to raise is a grammatical one (because I'm a Nazi like that): "...would kill a people instantly..." is a clash. "A" is singular "people" is plural, yada yada yada, I'm sure you know all this
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Post by Tom on Aug 5, 2013 11:06:33 GMT
*grumble grumble* Okay fine it's edited now
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Post by Echo on Aug 5, 2013 11:08:02 GMT
^_^ Like I said, grammar Nazi
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